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The Black and Yellow Mud Dauber
The black and yellow mud dauber is a type of wasp. Dauber is used to describe a crude or inartistic painter, and these wasps use mud as a building material for their nests, hence the name mud dauber. Their scientific is name Sceliphron caementarium and in Latin caementarium means mason or builder of walls.
Physical Characteristics
The wasps are black and yellow as their name suggests. Most of the body is black with some yellow markings on the legs, head, thorax, and sometimes abdomen. The wasp’s body differs from what most people think of when they hear wasp, it’s waist between the thorax and abdomen is very narrow, and is slightly longer than the abdomen itself. The wasp is approximately an inch in length.
Mating/Reproduction
The reproduction rate of these wasps is low, as the females will only lay 15 eggs in their lifetime. After mating the female will store the male’s sperm in in her seminal receptacle, allowing fertilization to take place at a later time. The female then finds a suitable location for her nest, somewhere sheltered from the elements like rock ledges, or trees, or underneath overhangs of manmade structures. She takes mud from ponds and slowly constructs cells to store her eggs. She hunts spiders by paralyzing them with her sting and places them within the cells with her eggs before closing the nest with more mud. The larvae must eat meat to grow and when the hatch they consume the spider that was trapped inside the nest. The larvae then spin cocoons and spend the winter inside before emerging in the spring.
http://www.fnanaturesearch.org/index.php?option=com_naturesearch&task=view&id=296
https://bugguide.net/node/view/6610
http://bioweb.uwlax.edu/bio210/s2012/bain_mega/Reproduction.htm
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your blog is well written but it does lack any in-text citations so adding some sources in to your text to give what you are saying some more backing. also watch some of your grammar as it takes away from the flow in the text. as for the organization it is pretty good but just reading it over a couple times and moving some of the details in to spots what are more related so there is less jumping between ideas. overall a good first draft.
Your organization throughout the profile is great, its very easy to follow and to understand. The sources seem to be reasonable and professional toward this profile. There is a good balance between interesting and scientific facts. Also can tell that there is some authentic voice within the text as well which is good. I didn’t see any proper in text citations in the species profile and the apa formatting for the references weren’t complete. So mabye complete all of the references properly and add in text citations.
Research quality seems to be good and reputable as well as recent
Organization is pretty good i would suggest itallics and bold it make it very clear for the sub heading.
citations need to be inputed and and refrenced
writing is good i would suggest possibly dumming it down a bit little bit less scientific but overall good and capturing to the audience