Draft 1 (359 Words)
“I believe in God and I believe in myself”
When I was about to write the blog ‘This I believe’, the topic came to my mind is about my belief in god and my belief in myself. So I titled it as “I believe in God and I believe in myself”. Since it is my first writing please pardon me for mistakes.
Like most of the population around the world, I believe in God. However I believe in myself. In my words God is an inner soul which lies in everyone, but most of the population are failed to find/feel it. I have been gone through many critical situations where I had no idea what to do next. Fortunately each and every situations I got help or care from my colleagues or from others without asking for it. I feel that it’s invisible hands of god that helped me all those time. However, I don’t believe in idolatry and I believe god is present everywhere and in everyone.
I believe in myself, one who believes himself can go through any situations or he can manage any circumstances. I had few experiences during my work in U.A.E as an engineer. I had gone through many situations in machine maintenance, they were critical and urgent too. At that time my presence of mind and my confidence to try something new helped me to overcome those situations. Whenever I go wrong, a popup will come in my mind that something is going to be wrong, that’s belief in myself.
Belief in God and belief in ourselves have some relation. Both of them give us confidence and energy to try something new or something we felt as difficult to do. Belief in God help us to relax our mind, which increases confidence and belief in ourselves.
To conclude, I belief in god and myself, because belief in god give me confidence and support, while belief in myself gives me presence of mind and energy to do whatever I think. For me belief in God is not a religious thing, it’s all about belief in yourself and your responsibility to help people surrounding you.
Draft 2 (377 Words)
“I believe in God and I believe in myself”
When I was about to write the blog ‘This I believe’, the topic came to my mind is about my belief in god and my belief in myself. So I titled it as “I believe in God and I believe in myself”. Since it is my first writing please pardon me for mistakes.
Like most of the population around the world, I believe in God. However I believe in myself. In my words God is an inner soul which lies in everyone, but most of the population are failed to find/feel it. I have been gone through many critical situations where I had no idea what to do next. Fortunately each and every situations I got help or care from my colleagues or from others without asking for it. I believe that it’s invisible hands of god that helped me all those time. Belief in god keeps us away from crimes, which give us confidence and positive energy for our goals. However, I don’t believe in idolatry and I believe god is present everywhere and in everyone.
I believe in myself, one who believes himself can go through any situations or he can manage any circumstances. I had few experiences during my work in UAE as an engineer. I had gone through many situations in machine maintenance, they were critical and urgent too. At that time my presence of mind and my confidence to try something new helped me to overcome those situations. Whenever I go wrong, a popup will come in my mind that something is going to be wrong, that’s belief in myself.
Belief in God and belief in ourselves have some relation. Both of them give us confidence and energy to try something new or something we felt as difficult to do. Belief in God help us to relax our mind, which increases confidence and belief in ourselves.
To conclude, I believe in god and myself, because belief in god give me confidence and support, while belief in myself gives me the presence of mind and energy to do whatever I think. For me belief in God is not a religious thing, it’s all about belief in yourself and your responsibility to help people surrounding you.
Draft 3/ Final Draft (564 Words)
“I believe in God and I believe in myself”
When I was about to write the blog ‘This I believe’, the topic came to my mind is about my belief in God and my belief in myself. So I titled it as “I believe in God and I believe in myself”. Since it is my first writing please pardon me for mistakes.
Like most of the population around the world, I believe in God. However, I believe in myself. In my words, God is an inner soul which lies in everyone, but most of the population are failed to find/feel it. I have been gone through many critical situations where I had no idea what to do next. Fortunately each and every situation I got help or care from my colleagues or from others without asking for it. I believe that it’s invisible hands of God that helped me all those time. Belief in God keeps us away from crimes, which give us confidence and positive energy for our goals. However, I don’t believe in idolatry and I believe God is present everywhere and in everyone.
I believe in myself, one who believes himself can go through any situations or he can manage any circumstances. I had few experiences during my work in UAE as an engineer. I had gone through many situations in machine maintenance, they were critical and urgent too. At that time my presence of mind and my confidence to try something new helped me to overcome those situations. Once there was an issue with one of the machines. And I found out that it’s related to software, usually, the software part is serviced by the manufacturer itself. Unfortunately, it was a Friday night and manufacturing company was holiday on weekends. So I took the chance, my manager asked me that “are you confident to do that” I said “yes”. I had an idea about how to do that. Within half an hour I cleared the issue by reinstalling the software part. My manager appreciated me and paid me extra as a reward. Belief in myself gave the confidence to do that.
Whenever I was in deep stress, something good will happen to relieve my stress. May it’s a presence of a good friend or happy news. I believe that those are all gifts from God. I believe that our actions are responsible for our fate. I have been helpful to others and in return, I am getting support from others whenever it’s needed. My belief in myself created a self-confidence and courage in me which helped me to lead in my career and personal life. Whenever I go wrong, a popup will come in my mind that something is going to be wrong, that’s belief in myself.
Belief in God and belief in us have some relation. Both of them give us confidence and energy to try something new or something we felt as difficult to do. Belief in God helps us to relax our mind, which increases confidence and belief in ourselves.
To conclude, I believe in God and myself, because belief in God gives me confidence and support, while belief in myself gives me the presence of mind and energy to do whatever I think. For me belief in God is not a religious thing, it’s all about believing in yourself and your responsibility to help people surrounding you.
1. Yes the draft is very believable and has the presence of a real person. The Voice seems very authentic and real. Basically its about believing in god and overall religion, what someone else thinks may not apply to everyone but I understand where the author is coming from completely.
2. I will say it is engaging. The author tells a story about many situations in his life where he was unsure of what to do next, and there was always a voice inside of him telling him the right answer, or god as you will. The author has done a great job of organizing his thoughts in paragraphs.
3. Of course it makes a good case for why its important to its audience. The author is describing something that he strongly believes in and something that has an effect on his every day life. He did a good job of providing detail and even telling stories of certain situations when he had to reach out to god for guidance. I completely understand where the author is coming from, and I understand the attitude to which hes referring to.
4. I believe the author might need to put a little more work into the introduction paragraph, and make it more of an attention grabber. Maybe just introduce a little more information into it.
5. I really did enjoy how the author ended the story. He says “God is not a religious thing, it’s all about belief in yourself and your responsibility to help people surrounding you.” This is a very professional and direct ending sentence, basically sums up the authors whole story which is very powerful I’d say.
1. The best belief any one can have is in god, so it is really authentic topic i can read
2. well organised in all paragraphs and separate thoughts about the writer about god in different paragraphs.
3. It is a good to learn about god and good to believe that you always have some positive power always supporting you to build your confidence
4. I think writer would have added more stories mentioning himself to build more interest in the draft
5. Some positive thoughts in the conclusion would have made this draft the best.