First Draft

Everyday we are involved in experiences- observing, encountering or being part of an occurrence that shapes our knowledge. “Some are the product of social mores and social expectations still others are new, different and challenging” (Boud, Keogh, & Walker, 1985). I wish I could come back to my college time and studied hard. I used to a bad girl in my family that I didn’t want to listen to my parents and did what I would like to do. Since my first semester in college, I dropped out and hung out with my friends all night, and did not care about college. After that, my teacher told my parents that I did not come to school for along time and I fail all subjects. My parents called me to come back home because I lived and studied far away my hometown, within reason that my mom was very sick and she had to stay in the hospital. I was very upset and worried; I ran fast and didn’t care what was happening around me. I did not pass judgment on anyone allowing the dark moments to control the emotions. When I arrived to the hospital and I was very regret, I just stood and cried in front of surgery room. I prayed so much; I prayed that I would lose 10 years to save my mother’s life. Fortunately, my mother passed. Later on, I tried to study hard; I got a scholarship and graduated with a very high GPA. After one month since graduation, I was accepted into a large company in the business development department. I had worked there for 1 year and I would like to gain my knowledge by studying aboard. I chose Canada and stared to research about this country. After 3 months, I arrived to Canada and started a new adventure.

Second Draft (396)

Everyday we are involved in experiences- observing, encountering or being part of an occurrence that shapes our knowledge. I wish I could come back to my college time and studied hard. I used to a bad girl in my family that I didn’t want to listen to my parents and did what I would like to do. Since my first semester in college, I dropped out and hung out with my friends all night, and did not care about college. After that, my teacher told my parents that I did not come to school for along time and I fail all subjects. My parents called me to come back home because I lived and studied far away my hometown, within reason that my mom was very sick and she had to stay in the hospital. I was very upset and worried; I ran fast and didn’t care what was happening around me. I did not pass judgment on anyone allowing the dark moments to control the emotions. When I arrived to the hospital and I was very regret, I just stood and cried in front of the surgery room. I prayed so much; I prayed that I would lose 10 years to save my mother’s life. Fortunately, my mother passed. Later on, I tried to study hard; I got a scholarship and graduated with a very high GPA. After one month since graduation, I was accepted into a large company that is royal company in Thailand; I worked in the business development department, I had got the job! It was a dream comes true. I could hardly believe it. I had worked there for 1 year and I would like to gain my knowledge by studying. I had always dreamt of studying abroad so I chose Canada and stared to research about this country. Instead of continuing study business, I have chosen culinary because I love to have my own restaurant. After 3 months, I arrived to Canada and started a new adventure.

I always believe and remember that No pain, no gain. When I memory about my college time, I always have emotion, my heart is still beating and I always cry when think about it. At the moment, although I busy with my study, part-time job and volunteer job, but I love them, I would love I can busy as much as I can.

3 DRAFT (444)

Everyday we are involved in experiences- observing, encountering or being part of an occurrence that shapes our knowledge. I wish I could come back to my college time and studied hard. I used to a bad and naughty girl in my family that I didn’t want to listen to my parents and did what I would like to do. Since my first semester in college, I dropped out and hung out with my friends all night, and did not care about college. After that, my teacher told my parents that I did not come to school for along time and I fail all subjects. My parents called me to come back home because I lived and studied far away my hometown, within reason that my mom was very sick and she had to stay in the hospital. I was very upset and worried; I ran fast and didn’t care what was happening around me. I did not pass judgment on anyone allowing the dark moments to control the emotions. When I arrived to the hospital and I was very regret, I just stood and cried in front of the surgery room. I prayed so much; I prayed that I would lose 10 years to save my mother’s life. Fortunately, my mother recovered. Later on, I tried to study hard; I got a scholarship and graduated with a very high GPA. After one month since graduation, I was accepted into a large company that is royal company in Thailand; I worked in the business development department, I had got the job! It was a dream comes true. I could hardly believe it. I had worked there for 1 year and I would like to gain my knowledge by studying. I always dreamt of studying abroad so I chose Canada and started to research this country. Instead of continuing to study business, I have chosen culinary because I would love to have my own restaurant. Specially, I would like to open a Vietnamese restaurant in Peterborough where I love lots in Canada. After three months, I arrived in Canada and started a new adventure.

I always believe and remember that No pain, no gain. When I memorize about my college time, I always have emotion, my heart is still beating and I always cry when think about that terrible time. At the moment, although I busy with my study, part-time job and volunteer job, but I very love them, I love to busy all day, I would love I can busy as much as I can.