To date writing  reflection from; This I Believe assignment, to date has mostly been favorable.  I generally need to shorten my sentences as both instructor and peers view my sentences are lengthy. Hard to understand from paragraph to paragraph is needed to be broken up to focus on a topic. Both peers and Instructor had reviews saying pretty much the same issues: (Kaitlyn Blondin Fri 9/28, 3:35PM) “This is an awesome topic for the theme “This I Believe”, thank you for allowing me to read it! That being said I feel like the introductory paragraph needs to be clearer what your belief is. Also I feel as though some of your sentences could be separated into two and there is a couple grammatical errors that make it a little hard to read through”. The general information given on the cultural topic was good but the need from peers was they wanted to know more on Indigenous culture. So I took the review constructively and analyzed the pros and cons.

In my reviews more referencing would of shed more information gathering by readers and given a overall better understanding of the material portrayed: (George Sowchuck Sat 10/6, 11:24 AM) “some background information is required if you are going to keep Treaty #3 in your work (i.e., few non-First Nations students at Fleming College will know what Treaty #3, signed in 1873”. I was able to adjust in This I believe assignment and add a good reference to incorporate a better understanding of the writings and content.

I want to focus on improving my referencing skills on the profile assignment. The seminars and lectures has given guidance on proper referencing. I want to incorporate at least two directed questions on the person I profile for quoting within my profile assignment.  Have at least 3 good references to the content in the profile assignment as well.

My greatest strength in my writings is my life experiences being put forth. This maybe the only positive I could say I have a head start with from my peers. My life stories seem to capture the interest and I get great feedback through the commentary and word of mouth.